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Nominator: Bremps (talk · contribs) 17:18, 4 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rhododendrites (talk · contribs) 02:25, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

First pass review below:

Lead

  • calling it a director's technique in the first sentence doesn't seem to capture the rest of the article. It's a specific kind of look. Directors use that look to portray insane/unstable characters. Sort of a subtle difference, but case in point: if it's a director's technique and not the look itself, the second photo doesn't depict a kubrick stare as there's no film being directed.
  • Combine first two paragraphs -- avoiding a single-sentence paragraph.
  • Most of the lead is not in the body. The lead shouldn't contain anything that isn't already covered below -- it's there to summarize the body of the article.

Usage:

  • Odd to see subheadings for "and Kubrick" and "by Kubrick". Maybe it would work best with the first paragraph "origin" which explains the coining of the term and use by kubrick in his various films. Then "use by others" which explains the first usage by Hitchcock, etc. Alternatively, the subheadings could just be removed as there's only two paragraphs under the main heading.
  • The claim about the first usage in Psycho should probably be attributed to the author of that book if it doesn't appear in any of the other sources. I see that other people have called the look in Psycho a Kubrick stare, but it's a wild claim to call it the first. Maybe a good idea to just say that people have found examples of Kubrick stares in older movies like Psycho, too.
  • "Since Kubrick's death..." is followed by two examples that preceded his death.
  • It looks like an anonymous user removed the bit about Trump for "bias" rasons. Did you see this? Looks like there are three decent sources making the comparison (Telegraph, Forbes, LA Times), which seems like a lot for the subject. Probably doesn't need its own section if there aren't other "outside of film" examples, though.

Reception and analysis:

  • "Drawing on the theories of Jacques Lacan, Far Out argues" - it doesn't look like Far Out draws on Lacan. She uses other people's Lacanian film studies work on cinematic gaze to make an argument in the paragraph beginning "Thus, when a character...". So something like "Drawing on Lacanian scholarship about cinematic gaze, Far Out's Aimee Ferrier argues..." or something along those lines.
  • "a specific Kubrick stare" - probably worth saying which stare.
  • "scholar Jens Kjelgaard-Christiansen" - if giving a title, something more specific than "scholar" would be preferable (professor of communications, for example). Also the name is misspelled.
  • "She adds" - I presume this pronoun is a mistake.
  • "critic Roger Ebert complains" - doesn't sound like a complaint in context?
  • "He also criticizes Kubrick for overusing the" - it doesn't quite seem clear this is what he's doing, either. He criticizes that particular use of it, at least.

Sources:

  • You quote from a McDowell interview, but don't cite the interview: https://ew.com/article/2014/11/29/malcolm-mcdowell-stanley-kubrick-clockwork-orange/ -- you could probably do more with that long quote. Since it's kind of the most iconic example, spoken by the person who performed it, you could even consider a block quote.
  • The Critical Companion to Stanley Kubrick cited itself cites two sources which would probably be worth tracking down.
  • Collin, Robbie (2016-09-03). "We Can't Take Our Eyes Off Them". The Daily Telegraph -- a search to try to find this returns only hits for this wikipedia article. can you check it?

Images:

  • Well the Clockwork Orange image is certainly appropriate. The selfie is kind of jarring to see, but doesn't go against any policy. Surprising to see nobody complained about it being used for the DYK when the Clockwork Orange is available and discussed directly, but that's not my business here. No issues.

Copyright:

Misc:

  • It looks like "Kubrick gaze" is a common synonym for this, and may open the door to some additional sourcing. It's also possible "Kubrick gaze" is a broader subject that's just about when his characters look into the camera, though.
  • I'm a little disappointed that nobody seems to distinguish this subject from just a standard fighter's stare: chin down, eyes forward. Also, it's become such a trope that post-Kubrick it often feels, as the kids say, cringy, and I'm surprised there isn't any real criticism. These are my personal WP:OR gripes, though -- not action items. :)

Ok. I think that's what I have. Great idea for an article (I have a soft spot for quirky film details). :) Going to place this on hold for now. — Rhododendrites talk \\ 16:18, 7 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rhododendrites Thanks for the review. Could you take a look at the article again? I implemented your suggestions. I'm fine with the Donald Trump content removal (it's a bit tangential in hindsight). "We Can't Take Our Eyes Off Them" by Robbie Collin is accessible with the Wikipedia Library. I couldn't find any RS for "Kubrick gaze", but I did make it a redirect. I'll take a look at the Critical Companion later to see if there's anything more worth adding. In the meantime, is there anything else that could be improved? Cheers, Bremps... 03:06, 8 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Alright. I think we're just about there. A few more things that shouldn't be too much trouble:

Lead

  • is the "intense" quote of sufficient weight for the lead? Looks like it's just one line in one of the sources. Also the lead frames it as "what it's used for" while the body says it "often heralds" something.
  • would be good to expand the lead a little bit -- it looks a little short for the article size. One way might be a bit about clockwork orange being the most prominent example, and that its cinematographer coined the term?

Description and usage

  • clarify Milsome was cinematographer on clockwork orange (as opposed to some cinematographer writing about the phenomenon later)
  • a little awkward to say kubrick used it especially in FMJ/Shining. "Most notably"?

Reception and analysis

  • link Lacanian
  • "a specific Kubrick stare" - probably worth saying which stare. (to be clear, following on this item above, I'm just thinking we might as well clarify it was the Private Pyle character)
  • no need for another link to the telegraph (there's one a couple sections above)
  • "Kubrick's decision to film Alex, an amoral character in A Clockwork Orange, from above makes Alex look "messianic"" reads a little awkwardly. Maybe "Kubrick's decision in A Clockwork Orange to film the amoral character Alex from above makes him look "messianic""?

Sources

  • Looks like some duplicate sources (e.g. Collin and Kjeldgaard-Christiansen.

Ok. I'll have more time this week than I have the last couple, so should be able to pass this as soon as the above is taken care of. Thanks for your patience, Bremps. — Rhododendrites talk \\ 17:29, 24 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • I'd say it's accurate broadly, I just did a direct quote to try and avoid WP:OR. I'd say it belongs in the lede. I got rid of the discrepancy
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Description and usage
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Reception and analysis
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Sources
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Alright, I think that's it. I don't mean to rush you @Rhododendrites, but I'd very much appreciate a speedy wrapup. Thanks for the in-depth review. Cheers, Bremps... 03:21, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

 Done Passed. Thanks for the neat article. :) — Rhododendrites talk \\ 12:49, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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