Talk:White-tailed jay/GA1
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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 06:02, 8 March 2024 (UTC)
- I am loving all these bird articles.
- Link nape to birdgloss.
- Done
- Personal preference, but I think "genus Cyanocorax" sounds better than "Cyanocorax genus".
- Done
- Why no link for de Sparre in the lead?
- Added
- We use IOC as WP's bird taxonomy, so the IOC list would be a better ref for it being monotypic and its placement in Cyanocorax.
- Changed
- No etymology for mystacalis?
- The closest I can find is this, where it says it's Latin for moustache. It's referencing a different species, what are your thoughts on using this source for that?
- "Some measurements are known from only one individual, who had a wing length" "One individual measured has a wing length"
- Changed
- "than its relatives in the Cyanocrax genus" to "than other species in its genus"
- Changed
- "preferring open areas" to "as it prefers open areas"
- Changed
- "down through El Oro and Loja" I don't think "down through" is appropriate here, since the range is disjunct.
- Reworded
- "It lives at elevations as high as down to sea level" Reads weirdly.
- Reworded, not sure I like it any better though, so happy to hear any suggestions!
- "steal eggs" Just say feeds on eggs instead.
- Changed
- "alone, apart from other white-tailed jays" Does this mean that they're far from other white-tailed jays, or that they are alone except for other white-tailed jays?
- Away from other white-tailed jays - I've changed the wording.
- Seems pretty comprehensive, did find this report of probable predation by a hawk that could be added.
- Added, I put it in Diet and feeding, but if you think it's better elsewhere I'm happy to move it.
- Scientific names in ref titles should be italicized.
- Fixed
- Book titles should be in title case.
- Fixed
- Spot-checked with BOW and some of the other references, all of them are reliable and verify claims made.
- That's all I have, nice work. AryKun (talk) 19:35, 9 March 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks for the feedback. Everything should be addressed. grungaloo (talk) 15:21, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- I'm passing for now, but note that the IOC World Bird List cites v14.1 and links to a 2020 archive link; make sure to update the archive link to a recent one that actually shows v14.1 later. AryKun (talk) 03:11, 12 March 2024 (UTC)
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